Pondering At The Idea (chapter 20)
So my creator was finally about to finish the companion I had anxiously longed for since my first breath into this gruesome world. I could not wait, the excitement was getting to me. So I watched him through the wondow as he created her. My panting made the glass unclear, but I could see he was almost done! Then his facial expression changed, as if he was afriad, but he was looking straight out. Staring into nothing but the air around him. Suddenly he began to destroy by only companion. As he did I looked on with rage, feeling like i did when I saw his brother William, but on a level much greater than that. I promised the creator I would declare my vengeance upon him, I would be there on his wedding night, waiting.
This post is pretty much the basics of what happened. This chapter had so much emotion in there that I think you should have put on your blog. There was so much more stuff to write about. Maybe later on, try writing about his inner thoughts and emotions on a much deeper level. Also don't forget the grammar!
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